

In the dark night time sky, only one star observed.

Sunday Whirl
Emerald Green Eyes
Look out upon devine illusion
An ominous sight
Which becomes rhythm
Beyond the bones of time
Celestial beings rocket
Across the star studded sky
Jostle for position
From which to shine
The balcony
An observation deck
Open the flap
A pantomime in the void
A black hole
Without the visions seen by
The emerald green eyes

Magpie Tales #74
Bewildered
I have no idea
What I look at
What I see
Is it your dark heart revealed
Is it a mask with many eyes to see
Or the face of your dark soul
Fear fills my pail
It frightens me
I will not follow
The path through
The dark and lonely wood
I take the long way home
I like the way your wordle poem begins and ends with ’emerald green eyes.’ As for the magpie, I’d take the long way home too. The image is eerie.
Two good poems, annell. Both eerie in different ways and both very evocative.
Both excellent…love the line ‘I take the long way home’! Oh, I just read your other comment from Mary…we both agree on the line!
Annell, I like the wordle poem. The love the opening of it.
Pamela
I am really enjoying the style and flow of your poetry. It is spare ~~ at the same time lush.
nice on the dark heart in the mask…that is a great pick up annell….
I enjoyed both poems… love how they connect.
Laurie’s right. After reading her comment I went back and reread and the poems connect in several places. Love the line ‘beyond the bones of time’.
margo
The pie’ is a fine example of how a good, dark poem should arise! I’d fill the pail, too, if I took the long route home, but I’m too much of a lady to say with what!!!
I agree with the above comments – very clever how the poems interconnect. 🙂
Taking the long way home is sometimes the best path to take…
You held on to a nice smooth flow with that wordle. Difficult in itself, but your other poem was enough to give me the creeps.
Love how all three of the pieces seem and feel like stepping stones, one to another almost like a slow dot to dot image of the whole emerging over time. I too have often preferred the long way home,
Elizabeth
http://soulsmusic.wordpress.com/
or is it the face of your dark soul? Nice capture for the magpie. And i love “rhythm/beyond the bones of time” in the first. The poems complement each other beautifully.
I like the use of the same phrase at beginning and end, suggesting it’s all in the blink of an eye.
delish
Taking the long way home – a wonderful ending for this poem.
Annell, your Wordle was beautiful and filled with imagery that really satisfied as I read it aloud.
The second, Magpie… have to tell you, that picture freaked me out a little bit – so many ways to identify it, so dense, and in some ways like a mask that seems like no fun at all! Your taking the long way home, the bits of uncertainty within, really worked.
Great work, as always! Amy
http://sharplittlepencil.wordpress.com/2011/07/20/teacher-says/
Annell, I love the wordle piece, it made me imagine the magpie mask’s eyes green. You reinvented mythology with this one, giving meaning to stars.
Brenda
I love “I take the long way home”. Nice.
Love your write on dying….I have learned alot about the body letting go and allowing the spirit to move on this past week…you write is timely and so poignant…bkm