Sunday Whirl July 3, 2011 Wordle #11
- An Intruder
The evening light was fading
After a quiet day
Work in the studio
Watch the Tour De France
Read a couple of short stories
Dinner French Onion Soup
Cleared the dishes
Flecks of yellow caught my eye
A guest in the garden
Distinctive but could identify
Turned in early
Flossed and locked up
The valley full of smoke
The hurtles ahead seemed manageable
Reaching for the flashlight
Stumbled on sleepy limbs
There you stand
You are not a guest
Uninvited… it isn’t right
Tossed what you could into a bag
Ran out the back door
Called the police
Waited for the siren
Looked into the darkness of the night
No evidence of your presence
Billfold and purse missing
Just an open back door
Leading into the blackness of the night
An intruder in the house
Distinctive but could not identify
annellannell 
Annell, This is frightening. You paint a scene with familiar bed time ritual and thought, then …violation. Shock, and relief when the intruder leaves. Well written.
I agree. A truly scary experience. Very well done, though–I love the foreshadowing in the garden. Still, that violation…
Each word was true last night. Thanks for your comment. Annell Livingston HC 74 Box 21860 El Prado, NM 87529
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Annell, this is scary. I hate people who do that sort of thing. I feel very secure with my dogs here. I never felt safe in the states. We lived in a nice neighborhood, too.
Pamela
Yes, it is rude. Not the way to act in proper society. Annell Livingston HC 74 Box 21860 El Prado, NM 87529
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Came home one night to find the doors all wide open, things missing, and have never really lost that sense of vulnerability. It has faded a great deal over the years, but it isn’t difficult to call it up. You rang bells with this one. Glad to know you are okay, and able to write about it. I have found that helps more than anything else. Positive thoughts coming your way.
Elizabeth
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Yes, it is not the first time, but the first time there was a person actually in the house, when we were in the house… you wonder, after all that is a killing offense where I come from. And were they prepared to kill us? It is scary. Sorry to bring up bad memories. But maybe a reminder to be careful! Thanks for your support. Annell Livingston HC 74 Box 21860 El Prado, NM 87529
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Annell you are a clever girl to turn a motley collection of words into such a good poem. You grabbed the attention from the off and sustained it through a shocking story.
Thanks for your comments Viv. Annell Livingston HC 74 Box 21860 El Prado, NM 87529
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I am always amazed at how the wordle words fall into place…whether in a fictional story, or an account of my life–right where I’m at! They seem to have done the same for you this go-round. Well-incorporated words. And the style with which you wrote this piece–rather matter-of-fact reporting–allowed the reader to develop his/her own emotions while not revealing the feelings you’re having as a result of the event…hope you’re doing ok. ~Paula
Oh, how scary, Annell. From the depth of emotion(I felt chills as I read it) and also from the comments, I gather this really happened to you. How scary to be face to face with an intruder. Glad you are okay. Hope they find him.
Thank you Mary, for your words and your support. It was unsettling. And if I had found him there, I think I would have had a heart attack. Let’s be very careful! Annell Livingston HC 74 Box 21860 El Prado, NM 87529
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Oh Annell, so sorry to hear that this is a true story! It was such a chilling read.
I’ve had my house broken into twice (I wasn’t home either time, thank God). I also had the tires stolen off my car while I was asleep in the house not 50 feet away. This poem brought back those memories – life as usual, interrupted by feelings of violation. My sympathies that you had to go through that too, Annell.
I have been a victim, more than several times … once during the night while we were sleeping. The feelings of violation then, and today, are overwhelming. This is an intense write, a good write.
Just plane rude and a killin’ offense where I come from. Inconvenient and scary! Hope he doesn’t come back. Thanks for your support! Annell Livingston HC 74 Box 21860 El Prado, NM 87529
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I understand that need to become an objective observer. And you are safe now, so you can walk around the event and look at it. Question: is the “distinctive but” could/could not “identify” a personal shorthand, birdwatching or something similar? It works really well here.